tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15253377.post3345713015304056891..comments2023-09-26T08:00:18.329-07:00Comments on Ember Madrone: Junior highMelanie J.http://www.blogger.com/profile/03701919968159394274noreply@blogger.comBlogger3125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15253377.post-50034384699841725622012-04-11T10:01:14.657-07:002012-04-11T10:01:14.657-07:00I cringed for you, hoping the reason he stood you ...I cringed for you, hoping the reason he stood you up wasn't what I expected.<br /><br />What a painful memory. I would have liked to have seen it told entirely from your teenage POV to bring the reader INTO the story. <br /><br />Overall, though, great job!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15253377.post-74030632729032088962012-04-10T19:44:10.920-07:002012-04-10T19:44:10.920-07:00The brutality of kids that age when really everyon...The brutality of kids that age when really everyone is just trying to fit somewhere. Good for you that you felt pretty that day...that special feeling was for you and not that stupid B!Ginahttp://doesanyonecarewhatiwrite.blogspot.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-15253377.post-24334598615449632992012-04-10T15:57:00.006-07:002012-04-10T15:57:00.006-07:00I really felt your anticipation of the meeting and...I really felt your anticipation of the meeting and the care you took to get ready. <br /><br />I think this would have been just a smidge stronger if you wouldn't have used your current perspective to show the beauty in the moment. I got that part of it through your descriptions, and I think you did a great job of showing it without needing to "tell" us that part.angelahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14974137283220034062noreply@blogger.com